Tuesday, 23 June 2009


three days later

I was going to go down to the small town to find my savior, I wanted to give him something and thank him for saving me since I didn’t even have the chance to say thank you. But I needed to do a special dish since that was the only thing I was capable of to show my gratitude.

I was baking my special coconut cookies all day. I added a few slices of mangos to make the cookies fancier. My neighbor and god mother Enola came over to help me, she stuck around the house for the past three days, she was really afraid to leave me alone.

At noon the cookies were warm and ready. I sprinkled coconut on top of them and left them with Enola while I went to my bedroom to get dressed. I put on my old jeans, and the top I wore for occasions; an embroidered blouse Enola got me for my birthday.

I let my hair down and swept it to the side to hide the permanent scar on my left cheek. I got my keys, threw them in my purse and went downstairs to find Enola waiting for me.

Enola saw the man who saved me and recognized him, he was a town resident, she declared. So I had to bring her along with me since she knew where to find him. We took a cab and drove all the way to the small town. I wasn’t fond of our little trip, cars made me nauseous and I wished we could walk but the heat and distance weren’t helping.

The house was huge comparing to the houses next to it. It was also very different. The house's bricks were a combination of baby pink and purple, surrounding enormous windows, and a little green door. And then came the little garden, which was breathtaking, it consisted of different kinds of flowers; peonies, lilies, jasmine, hibiscus and roses. It looked like a house from a fairytale.

"Should we knock?" I asked Enola.
She nodded and headed to the little door with me behind her.

A short old woman opened the door for us; she welcomed us inside after hearing what we wanted. "You probably mean Mr. Casseus, I'll give him a call, he'll be here in a minute" she said.

A blonde guy came to us after less than a couple of minutes. He had a friendly smile on his beautiful, tanned face. I couldn’t keep my eyes off of him, his hair crowned his head like leaves of gold under the sunlight, he was wearing white from head to toe, his blue eyes were so pierced against his dark skin, and I would have mistaken him for a Greek god with that name of his.

"Rosa said you wanted to meet me, How can I help you?" he asked politely.

" I think she got it wrong… I, um…do you have a brother Mr. casseus?" I asked hesitatingly.

"No" he frowned. "Are you sure you got the address right?"
"Isn’t this Donna Carina's residence?" Enola raised her brow.

"It is the one" a different male voice came behind us.

I looked up at the voice's source. He was the same man who was at my bedside three days ago. He sat on the edge of the sofa beside Casseius.

I examined him shamelessly before I spoke, he looked so messy, his hair naturally disarrayed and wild. His dark skin so smooth yet he needed to shave, he was so huge but he had a body of an athlete. He was beautiful, yet his face wasn’t perfect like Casseius's, his face looked alive, there was this aspect of life in his beautiful, imperfect features.

"Hey I'm Vanessa, I didn’t have the chance to say thank you the other day" I began. "So I…I decided to come by and…"

"I know who you are, sure" he interrupted me coldly.

"oh" I grunted. " um, I thought you might like this" I handed him the cookies.

He looked at me blankly.

"That's very nice of you Vanessa, Alex likes cookies, we all do" Casseius shot Alex a hard glance.

"Yeah, thanks" Alex said coldly, eyeing my scar.

I was taken by surprise by Alex's attitude. What was that all about? Maybe he was upset about something else. I thought, suddenly defending him.
When we left the strange fairytale house, I felt uneasy and was really irritated.
"what are you thinking of Nessa?" Enola eyed me suspiciously, interrupting my thoughts while we were in the cab.
" Those people were weird, I didn't get them, what were they to eachother if they weren't brothers?!"
" well, Donna Carina is Alex's mother, I think the other man is the son in law or something, I'm not sure" Enola said.
" and how on earth you know so much about them?!" I asked her urgently.
" my daughter used to work at their house Nessa" she said.
" oh, okay, that guy,Alex wasn't really nice" I muttered angrily.
the cab pulled over and I stepped out hastily. " thanks for coming with me today Enola, it meant a lot" I forced a smile.
" of course I'll come with you, you silly!" she patted my hand gently.
" um, I'll be needing my privacy, there's no need to stay with me all day, I'll be fine!" I sounded desperate for my freedom. she laughed.
"sure" she said. " just don't forget to come by to my house tonight, the kids will be around".


I lay on the white, strange bed, I shriek and moan with agony, the pain is so close to my heart, my heart aches. I try to open my eyes, I can't. a very dark, evil force is pulling me down, down , down...until I'm out of bandwidth.

to be continued....


Dreamer;* said...

H O O K E D !

Anony said...



malaqa ma3aref if im first wala la :(

moi said...

dreamer: sobagtay anony hehe,;**

anonYYY: ofcourse ur first;p just not this once:P

Anonymous said...

wooow!! seriously this story is amazing..i feel that is has wayid emotions like it's soo deep... and honestly i'm a huge fan of ur writing...plzzzzz continue i luv ur stories and this is a breath-taking one ; )

Anony said...

weeeeeeeeeee gameetha :\ 3ad farg wayed :P

enshallah shfe alex yan chena kan la6eef thak elyom ? :O

mo ga3da afhaam :@ i need part 3 3ashan afham (A)

Average.Q8i said...

Shbeee9eeer :P?

Anonymous said...

the story is amaaaaaazzzinng!!! alez is soo rude , i liked the greek looking guy more but alex seems mysterous , and thats kinda well... HHOOTT!!!!

waaiiting for the next post!!!!!!! :P


Anonymous said...

mooooooooorrrreeeeee faaasssstt plz!!!!!


madeline said...

i want coconut cookies;p, part 3 asaaaaaap!

Kindle My Heart said...

WOW! That was so good! I need more :D!!!!!!!!!!!

moi said...

anon:thanx hunny:),yeah it sure will have many surprises, glad u liked it;*

anonYYY: shelt el comment moderation 3shanich;p

average q8: lol wait and seee;p

juju: yeah i liked his character better too;p hehe, soon enshallaa;*

apples: i'll try to write it asap:)

madeline: if i can cook i would do em for u ;p

kindle my heart: sure maam;p;*

CuteandCuddly said...

please more fast !!!!!!!!!

please cant function need more !!!!!!!!

i am hooked !!!!!!!\

yalla next one :)

Starlight<3 said...


You're writing does that a lot to me, it seems :P

I really enjoyed every bit of this story and I hope you extend it over more than just a few parts.

Post soon,


Anonymous said...

u know what i like about u? u r different than any other blog writer, ur veryyy unique and u dont copy others


love ya;* said...

lovin it

Anonymous said...

Amazingly written :*

Anonymous said...

This is BEAUTIFUL! I absolutely love it!

moi said...

cute and cuddly: loool im gonna post it now!

starlight: aww im glad! ur comments makes me speeechless;)

pammy: thanxxxx dear;** glad u see it this way

love ya: :))

just a teen: ;** thanx dear